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PLEASE GIVE REVIW FOR the following attached each essay drafts by their names.(classmates) please follow the instructions as well. thank you. Please consider the following attributes upon submission of your peer reviews: Always reread your written observation before submission. Give detailed responses that generate more in-depth conversations on the subject. Remain professional; discuss the strengths/weaknesses of the submission. Provide clear suggestions and praise when necessary. State appropriate feedback. Each peer review response should be at least 1-2 paragraphs in length and should provide specific feedback on what the student can improve and/or what strengths exist in the draft. Links to an external site.Only high quality peer reviews will be considered (you should be thorough and specific in your feedback – “Great job! Your essay was really interesting and well-written,” for example, would not qualify for any extra credit. Here are two examples of “QUALITY” Peer Review responses: First thing I noticed after reading your paper is how well you have managed to organize your thoughts and come up with a greatly researched paper. I think you did a great job capturing the attention of a reader who knows nothing about space exploration, explaining which space program is best. I enjoyed reading your introduction as it captures ones imagination making it possible to perceive the outer space. Your introduction is quite detailed as it provides the history of the space war as it was known in the mid-20th century. Your use of statistics in explaining the resources used in the space exploration program provide legitimacy to your arguments. The fact that you cite your sources also shows that you have conducted a proper research process before writing down your arguments. You have used statistics to show which space program is best, and after reading your paper, I agree that SpaceX would be a better alternative. My only criticism is on the fact that you did not have strong transitions. Using transitions makes it easier for the reader to have a general understanding of what your arguments might be. At the same time, using transitions ensures that you clearly articulate your arguments in an easier manner and thus prevents regurgitation of arguments or information. I appreciate your use of relevant references to help support your arguments. I noticed that most of your references were from peer reviewed journals which is great for a research paper. You have included the title page, headers, and page numbers. However, an APA paper should have the running head, which is missing. I think you have done a great job in articulating your arguments and making your point. This was a great paper. Thanks for doing a great job. And the second one: So interesting and this was a good read with logical structure. In the beginning what struck me was the title. To me the word “Obsolete” means unusable or to be replaced with something new. Like, the iphone 3 is obsolete. However, I know you want to say “A thing of the past” or “No longer.” Perhaps look for another word there. Paragraph form and overall length look good. Earlier on in the paper you may want to give an example of (naming) 4-5 exotic animals. You get to it awhile later when you discuss birds, snakes, and then the animals that cause injuries. Your position throughout the argument is very clear. It’s cool how you gave a date and history of how this problem evolved. You cited many references with great statistics that back up your point. Good EVIDENCE, that is. Maybe I missed it but an opposing view and rebuttal from you didn’t stand out. You could find a formal opposing view by looking up “proponents of exotic animals.” Good summary and conclusion. Add our teacher’s name to your title page. As your other reviewer mentions you want to correct your references page to APA format rather than just show links alone. That’s where I need to spend tons of time on my essay, (the references.) Cool and interesting! All the best
